04/27/25 - Day 27 of 30
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NaPoWriMo Prompt
And now for today’s optional prompt. W.H. Auden’s “Musée des Beaux Arts” takes its inspiration from a very particular painting: Breughel’s “Landscape with the Fall of Icarus.” Today we’d like to challenge you to write your own poem that describes a detail in a painting, and that begins, like Auden’s poem, with a grand, declarative statement.
My Poem
Inspirational Painting: The Wounded Deer - Kahlo, Frida
Wounded Deer Karma
(Original Poem)
There must be a frisson when the deer knows it’s doomed.
At first it is only startled into
Log leaps
And
Quick-turn
Bolts
As hunters’ chuckling grunts precede taut bows.
Then the first arrow pierces, a quick dagger
Strike.
Off it
Bounds in
Panic
Arrow shaft bouncing, rending quivering shoulder meat.
Three, four, shafts, and more,
Thwick thwickthwick
Through the air.
Find lamprey-toothed purchase in flowing red hide.
With
Hammer jack
Heart thumps,
The deer stops.
Stock still
Until
Shivers course through the stag in dawning throes.
It cannot escape. It now knows karma.
Dropping in supplication to fate,
Sacred cervine majesty endures
As flensing blades
And unassailable darkness
Still the stag’s heart.
Wounded Deer Karma
(Rewrite)
Flank flutter frisson
When the deer knows doom.
First, only startled,
Log
Leaps,
Quick-turn
Bolts,
Hunters’
Chuckling grunts precede
Taut drawn bows.
First arrow
Flung,
Quick dagger
Strike.
Deer bounds
Off.
Wild-eyed
Panic!
Arrow bounces,
Rends
Quivering shoulder
Meat.
Three, four
Shafts and more,
Thwick thwick-thwick
Through charged air.
Strike strike-strike,
Lampreys hooked
In red-flow
Hide.
Hammer jack
Heart thumps,
Deer stops.
Stock
Still
Until
Shivers-course,
Dawn-throes,
Karma
Known.
No escape.
Supplicant fate,
Sacred cervine majesty
Endures.
Flensing
Blade-borne
Darkness
Stills its
(thump-thump)
Pure
(thump
thump)
Stag
(thump)
Heart.
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